Revise my first draft

The first draft of my project has a lot of problems. Professor Rebecca revised my first draft and sent it to me with email, which helped me a lot to revise me first draft. The first draft is too simple which does not have the background, pictures, hyperlinks, and the recommended reading. The audiences that I need to focus on. There shouldn’t be the first person in the paper because the paper that uses other resources to write which is not the author’s opinion. I also need to improve my writing skill, like I should use some connected phrases to make my paper smoother. The format should be single space which is the requited by the webpage. The font and the size of my title and sub-title should be over striking and bigger than the size of the context. I should also highlight my thesis statement as well. Therefore, making my paper as much clearly and beautiful as better.

I did not see my peer review in the facebook discussion webpage. Maybe my partner forget to post it. Therefore, I cannot write the peer review part here.